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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should, therefore, be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Introduction to
computer
 technology has brought swift progress in
education sector
Suggestion
the education sector
. Governments are planning to implement more digital classrooms and incorporate
computer
 software in
teaching process
Suggestion
the teaching process
.
However
, some adepts believe that by depending more on computers, teaching pose some risk to students. I disagree
to
Suggestion
with
this
 notion to an extent, and
this
 essay discusses the advantages of using
computer
 applications for teaching, as well as the possible problems associated with it.
Firstly
,
Information
 technology has penetrated so deep into different levels of society, that it is very easy now for a student to access
information
 through
internet
Suggestion
the internet
. Being able to reach to a vast sea of knowledge through search engines, like Google, students can always use a
computer
 to acquire extra
information
, through research topics and academic videos posted by scholars.
For example
, Google now has a separate search tool to
fossick
 the given keyword or topic, only in academic books which is available in digital format in Internet.
Secondly
, by using online study portals, learners can benefit from the teachings of international lecturers of any world famous universities, without spending the time and money to travel to
such
 destinations.
On the other hand
, experts
also
 fear some threats possessed by the over-involvement of
computer
 tools for teaching. There is no efficient method to verify humongous amount of
information
 stored in all the websites, and so, if a student access any wrong
information
 online, it can create detrimental effect on learning.
In addition
 to that, pupil loses their writing skills, which shall achieve through lecture note preparation or project works, if they depend largely on digital books. In conclusion, in
this
 fast-paced environment, it is very essential to incorporate
latest technology
Suggestion
the latest technology
 and gadgets along with classroom coaching and utilize their benefits. And is safe from their demerits, if
such
 coaching is carried out under the proper guidance of a teacher.
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