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Some people believe that people have the right to university education, and government should make it free no matter what their financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is
agrued
present reasons and arguments
argued
agreed
 that
everyone
 has the
right
 to access university
education
 so
government
Suggestion
the government
 should make it free regarding of their
finacical
marked by excessive enthusiasm for and intense devotion to a cause or idea
fanatical
 background. Personally, I partly agree with
this
 point of view. On the one hand, it is true that people have the
right
 to higher
education
. Nowadays, most jobs require some specific knowledge and skills which cannot obtain in
highschools
Suggestion
high schools
. Going to universities can
boarden
make broader
broaden
 the mind and equip
everyone
 with necessary skills in order to have better preparation for future jobs. With these knowledge and skills, people will have chances to get well - paid jobs which may help to improve their quality of life. As
everyone
 has the
right
 to have a better life, they
also
 have the
right
 to university as well to change their life.
On the other hand
, higher
education
 cannot free for
everyone
 because of many reasons.
Fisrtly
Suggestion
Firstly
, to ensure the best study condition, universities need to invest money for many aspects
such
 as modern equipment, reference books or facilities so that each student
have
Suggestion
has
 to contribute
for
Suggestion
to
 these.
Secondly
,
national budget
Suggestion
the national budget
 is unable to cover the educational fee for
everyone
 because there are other aspects which
also
 need the support of government
such
 as health care or environment.
Additionally
, some rich students can afford completely the tuition fee and it is not necessary to make it free for them. In conclusion, I believe that
although
everyone
 has the
right
 to university
education
, it is not necessary to make it free for
everyone
 no matter what their financial background.

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