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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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In some parts of the US, adolescents are not allowed to be outside their home after a certain hour of the
night
 if they are not accompanied by an
adult
. In my opinion,
this
 is justified because adolescents are too young to keep themselves safe and secure at all times.
Hence
, it's essential for them to be accompanied in order to ensure their safety and prevent them from getting involved in some detrimental activities. Adolescents in general love to live life like free birds. The safety of the child is of paramount importance for any parent and in some areas of the US,
this
 is often compromised during late nights.
Firstly
, as per the statistics, some localities and areas have a higher crime rate than others. The miscreants and paedophiles operate at
night
 after a particular time;
hence
, in
such
 cases, it is advisable and sensible that teenagers who are naive and sometimes volatile in their interactions with
such
 criminals are accompanied by an
adult
 to deter the crime and mishap. 
In addition
, some areas are prone to accident mainly due to the movement of heavy vehicles, so an
adult
’s presence and their driving experience
prevents
Suggestion
prevent
 adolescents from any accidental hazards.
Moreover
, there are many anti-social groups that operate during
night
Suggestion
the night
 and try to entice the young teenagers into activities that are detrimental for them
such
 as, drugs and alcohol consumption. The presence of an
adult
 or a parent dissuades them in approaching the teenager and
hence
 prevents them from getting involved in activities that are baneful for them as an individual, as well as
has
Suggestion
having
 harmful effects on the society and the community. In conclusion, it is pivotal for a teenager’s safety and holistic growth without any interruption that they are accompanied by an
adult
 after a certain time of the
night
;
hence
 the 'curfew' is rightly justified.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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