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The gap between rich and poor is increasing. What problems does it cause? What solution can you suggest?

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Socio-economic gap
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The socioeconomic gap
Socioeconomic gap
Socioeconomic gaps
 among rich and poor class has increased over the past few years
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With the trend of rich getting richer and poor dying with hunger elites
segredated
separated or isolated from others or a main group
segregated
 the under-
privilaged
blessed with privileges
privileged
 labour-class in all domains of life.Not only they lead different
life styles
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyles
 the children are
bought
take something or somebody with oneself somewhere
brought
 up with the ingrained perception of staying away from poors as they are from a different side of the planet. Plummeting economy and higher unemployment ratios are the most dominating cause
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 While blue-collared professionals are earning more owing to the better education and
developement
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
developments
oppurtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 that seems far-fetched for the poors striving to
fullfil
put in effect
fulfil
 the most basic needs like food
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shelter and clothes
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Increased inflation rates and no pay rises have made it impossible to think about pursuing education for a better and brighter future for the upcoming generation. The recent crime
statisctics
a branch of applied mathematics concerned with the collection and interpretation of quantitative data and the use of probability theory to estimate population parameters
statistics
reaveal
make visible
reveal
reveals
revealed
 a disturbingly
higher
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high
 number of young individuals involved in street crime and robbery specifically in posh areas of the city
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lesser job
oppurtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 and illiteracy leads youth to get money by any means with no sense of
conscienousness
an alert cognitive state in which you are aware of yourself and your situation
consciousness
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Health issues are one of the biggest concerns that has surfaced (infectious diseases
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child mortality and morbidity
etc
continuing in the same way
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in slum areas due to
unhygenic
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 living conditions and
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
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 I believe in order to rectify the ever-increasing gap
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government officials need to come up with legislations to provide basic needs to all irrespective of class
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there is a need for creating more job
opppurtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 with fair wages to put an end to unemployment
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the root cause of all the problems in society
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Employment and education is the ultimate solution
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