In some countries people's weight has significantly increased while their level of health have decreased. What do you think may be the causes of this problem? What solutions can you suggest to solve this problem?

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Obesity has become major issue all around the world. Maintenance of a healthy life is a challenge in current time. There are many reasons of stoutness, which we will discuss below. One of the
reason
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reasons
behind gaining weight
is long working
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has long been working
has long worked
hours, which leads to selection of fast foods. Junk food
are
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is
pre-cooked for easy and quick heating and contains preservatives that provide momentary satisfaction to the taste buds, but leave the deposition of fats in the body.
Food for e
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Food, for me
Food for me
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which includes bread, fizzy drinks, and wafers results in
increase
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an increase
in weight “Early to bed, early to rise” quote has been long forgotten. Unhealthy life style
such
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as irregular meal time, sleeping hours, and non-exercise
are
introduces an alternative
or
some other reason behind plumpness.
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