There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter: Describe the problems Explain how these problems are affecting the public Suggest some changes that could be made Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I think you are doing great and healthy. I am writing to bring your attention to a series of issues that have been plaguing the public transport system in our area recently. At the moment, I am a student and I am studying in Almalyk. I am satisfied with my study.
, I and my friends have a few issues. Nowadays, the public transport system has got late from their usual time, because your transport company has reduced vehicles,
as a result
, passengers can not reach their destination on time.
Due to
the problem, many residents are late to their destination, and eventually, they are out of work. Not only the decreasing number of vehicles but
the high cost of tolls is a problem for us. I think that you will solve
issue and increase your company's number of vehicles, alternatively, you will think about the toll and you will reduce your toll and
I suggest that you instruct your employees to be at work on time. I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem. Yours sincerely, Ozodaxon.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that the letter has a clear structure with an introduction, development of ideas, and a conclusion. The paragraphs should each contain a single, focused idea to improve coherence.
Task Achievement
The response to the task is partially complete. All parts of the task have been addressed but not fully developed. More detailed descriptions and explanations of the issues, including specific examples, would enhance the response.
Tone Appropriateness
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter. Use language appropriate for formal correspondence with a transport company manager. Avoid informal expressions or overly friendly language.
Lexical Resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary, aimed at showing the ability to discuss topics at length and to express yourself precisely.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
Include a variety of complex sentence structures to demonstrate grammatical range, while ensuring accuracy in grammar and punctuation.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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