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Robots are taking all jobs all around the world. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Artificially intelligent robots are progressively replacing the humans in the workplace. While it is suggested that most of the menial
obs
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
jobs
 will be taken by robots, few works which require
human touch
Suggestion
the human touch
a human touch
 cannot be replaced. In my opinion, I consider that there are some jobs will be carried out by people.
Body paragraph 1
To embark on, robots take
majir part
Suggestion
a major part
major part
the major part
 of the
work
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 that does not require specific and complex human skills.
In other words
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, many companies will turn to artificial intelligence because it is far less expensive as compared to hiring, training and employing a human. The supermarkets in Australia,
for example
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, many cashiers have been replaced by these automated machines that cost less.
In addition
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, they
work
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 around the clock and does not require holidays or holiday pay. For these reasons, jobs that can be replaced by
robotic station
Suggestion
a robotic station
 will be replaced.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, there are some human jobs that cannot be replaced by these robots. Put simply, some
work
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 needs 'human touch'. These jobs include medicines, psychology, education and social
work
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 where physical interaction is mandatory.
For instance
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, to cure some
disease it
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disease, it
 is needed that
diagnosis
Suggestion
the diagnosis
 of disease should be done by human doctor as having similar family.
Thus
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, robots will never be able to achieve social bonding.
Conclusion
To conclude, most of the human employment will be overtaken by robots. Unskilled labour will eventually be done entirely by artificial machines,
however
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, the job that
require
Suggestion
requires
 human specific skills will always exist. In my opinion, very few human jobs will be safe in increasing artificially intelligent workforce.

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