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Some people believe that if people are allowed to work after the age of 60, it will cause some problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #age
Whether people should be allowed to
work
 after attaining the
age
 of 60 or not, is debatable. It has been suggested by a few people that when people are allowed to
work
 after the
age
 of 60
then
this
 will become problematic. In my opinion, it is necessary for every country to specify that people would not be eligible to
work
 after 60's.
To begin
 with, people who are above
age
 60 will take most of the jobs and results into
unemployement
the state of being unemployed or not having a job
unemployment
 for the younger generation.
In other words
, if old people do not get
retirement
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retirement, then
then
 there will be less job opportunities left for the upcoming generation. In
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
,
for example
, some private industries has been increased the
work
age
upto
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up to
80's which
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the 80's, which
the 80's which
 results in job scarcity for the youth.
In addition
, aged people
becomes
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become
 more prone to health related problems due to
ageing
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age
. For these reasons, people should not be allowed to
work
 in their old
age
.
Furthermore
,
this
 would
also
 create
hurdle
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hurdles
 in the economy of the nation. Put simply, aged people do not get well with the recent technology. As, most of the jobs nowadays require technical skills which will help in boosting the economy and older people find
such
 skills hard to learn.
For instance
, a recent
artical
nonfictional prose forming an independent part of a publication
article
 revealed that 30% of the software used in the industries is
replacing
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replaced
 every year to ensure position in the international market and that can be learned if someone has
qualification
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qualified
 in it.
Thus
, technical skills will
also
 become
problem
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problematic
 for the aged person. To conclude, there will be chances of
problem
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a problem
problems
 if over
60's people
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60's, people
 are allowed to
work
. In my opinion,
however
, it is mandatory to put
halt
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a halt
 on doing
work
 after attaining the
age
 of 60.
Submitted by Rajneet Kaur on

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