The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, criminal activities committed by teenagers are on the rise. Some people believe, improving parental techniques in parents is the sole way to curb
this
growing trend.
This
essay will discuss why I just partially agree with
this
statement. There are two primary reasons why
delinquency rate
Suggestion
the delinquency rate
in youngsters cannot be controlled just by employing better parenting aides.
Firstly
, since teenagers spend most of their time with their friends, they get directly influenced by them. If they indulge into bad company, there become prone to criminal activities.
For example
, a young fellow I know used to play football
in
Suggestion
on
the ground located in front of my house, started smoking and in a span of six months I saw him having narcotics due to bad companionship of his peers.
Secondly
, seminaries
also
play an important role in grooming students and help them become a responsible citizen of the society. It has been observed that neither teachers nor our syllabus is in line to fulfil
this
vital requirement.
For instance
, students these days don't even know the importance of laws and its implications. Institutes must organize trips to jails where they should see the misery of the people who have committed crimes in the past. Clearly, lawbreaking actions can be reduced massively by avoiding bad company and having schools focus more on educating students on the importance of laws and
repercussions
Suggestion
the repercussions
of breaking them. On the flip side, since parents are role-model for their children, they simply try to replicate their actions. If parents are habitual of abiding by the laws, children will
also
be following them because parents are generally the most influential personalities for their descendants.
For example
, the government of
UAE
Suggestion
the UAE
has initiated a reward program in order to appreciate good drivers on the roads. While interviewing the appreciated drivers most of them revealed
that they adhere the
Suggestion
that they adhere to the
traffic rules because their father used to do the same. Clearly, parents can play their part and improve the situation up to some extent. In conclusion,
this
essay discussed Why I believe that criminality in young criminals can be curtailed educating adolescents to void wicked fellowships and revisiting the emphasis of our
education
Suggestion
educational
curriculum. In my opinion, I partially agree with the statement and believe that educating parents will only bring about limited results and other strategies can be employed to overcome
this
problem.
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