Many regions in the world rely on tourism for the revenue it generates. However, some people complain about the problems that come with tourism. What are some of these problems and how can they be solved?

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In
this
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contemporary era, More places in the universe
mostly depends
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mostly depend
on the tourism for the income it creates.
Although
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, Some people objectify the causes that occur with tourism.
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essay will discuss the major causes and the solutions to overcome
these problem
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this problem
these problems
.
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, The people of
local community
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the local community
local communities
a local community
will face
grevious
causing fear or anxiety by threatening great harm
grievous
problems where clashes can occur with locals and tourists.
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, the traffic will increase where it
can leads
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can lead
to air pollution.
Similary
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Similarly
, profits generated from tourism will go to
foriegn
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
countries
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as tour operators rather than to local community and the companies may bring their own workers for skilled jobs leaving the low skill jobs to local people with less pay
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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