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Life was better when technology was simpler .To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#life #technology
The
specificed
(sometimes followed by 'to') applying to or characterized by or distinguishing something particular or special or unique
specific
 topic is very pertinent as the same is being discussed
at
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in
 multiple global forums. In
this
 contemporary era,
technology
 is progressing at an exponential pace. The
last
 two
decade
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decades
 have seen enormous changes in the way people
lives
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live
 with many advances in
this
technology
 field. Numerous mortals think that life was better in past
time
 when
technology
 was simpler while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 don'
t
 agree with
this
.
Technology
 has revolutionised every aspect of life there are many advantages of
technology
 is discussed in upcoming paragraph. To commence with
,
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,
in
today
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today's
 hectic schedule people don'
t
 have enough
time
 to meet their
beloved but
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beloved, but
 with the help of
technology
,
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,
aperson
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a person
 can easily communicate and connect with the world anytime
,
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,
anywhere.
Technology
 has made life very easy as well as it consumes less
time
.
Further
,
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,
with
technology
 people
work
 as well as no need to commute for sending
letter
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letters
 or any other
work
.
Moreover
, a person
gain
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gains
 any information related any field
from
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of
 internet and daily news about what is going on in
world
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the world
.
Nevertheless
,
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,
the effects of
this
technology
 have not all been
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
.
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.
 Mortals are so dependent on
technology
 nowadays. They don'
t
 like to do physical
work
 as well as don'
t
 use traditional ways to
work
.
This
 will put negative impact on upcoming generation. People are so addicted to
socail
relating to human society and its members
social
 media they don'
t
 like to spend
time
 with their family
as a result
 the stress is increasing day-by-day. Children are the most affected by the
technology
 and harm their health
.
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.
apart
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Apart
 from
this
,
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,
it is
also
 a major issue of increasing environmental problems. Taking everything into account, in the light of aforementioned arguments. It is believed that
technology
give
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gives
 ease and comfortable if it is used
in
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with
 a limit so that it don'
t
 affect upcoming generation.

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