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Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced.

#missions #space #earth #demand #attention
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Nowadays,
Space
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 Exploration
are becoming
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is becoming
 popular because of growing
technology
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 and greater enhancements in advanced tools. For many countries, especially developed and under developed nations are allocating more budget to
study
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solar system
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the solar system
 in depth.
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However there
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However, there
 are both pros and cons
for
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of
 spending money on
this
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. I will completely agree that
this
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missions
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mission
 should be continued
further
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 to improve
technology
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 to a greater extent or
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next level
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the next level
. Owing to the
technology
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 change, Demand for the source of many
materials increasing
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materials, increasing
 and to overcome
this
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space
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 exploration is must.
Eventhough
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Even though
huge amount
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the huge amount
is spend
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spends
 on mission, the data collected and transmitted to earth has valuable insights. Many scientific theories produced are
result
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the result
a result
 of a
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space
Suggestion
study space
study
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.
Instace
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Instance
, Due to
space
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 exploration now scientist
are
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is
 able to
study
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 about black hole theory and prove
Newtons
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Newton's
 work are not real. In their
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study they
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study, they
 are able to find faster materials than
speed
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the speed
 of light.
Also
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 nowadays it has made possible to forecast weather reports in advance and provide greater internet connectivity.
For Example
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, Now companies
started
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have started
 implementing 5G
technology
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 for smooth connection.
Instead
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 to reduce missions the
rockets re
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rockets, re
-usability can be made possible.
For example
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 SpaceX founded by Elon Musk recently launched a Falcon heavy vehicle which carries satellites
to
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into
in
space
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 and performs safe landing of rockets which will make cheaper. To conclude, Money spent on
space
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 has greater advantage since it helps to improve
technology
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 and develop more advanced theories and to forecast weather report
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