Experts say that older people stay healthy when they spend time with others.nowadays older people experience loneliness and poor health conditions.what are the causes of this and suggest some solutions

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According to experts the way for older
peolple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
to stay healthy is to spend time with others and to do exercise daily.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will discuss some of the reasons behind it suggest some measures to tackle
this
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problem.
Firstly
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, there are a number of reasons behind it from which the
first
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is nowadays people have become workaholic to be more precise, these days people have much work to do and they find it challenging to concentrate on both on
work
Suggestion
the work
along with older people.
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therefore older
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Therefore, older
Therefore older
people remain
deprive
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deprived
from the devotion of their time.
Secondly
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, as everyone is busy they
dont
do not
don't
prepare food at
home which
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home, which
is healthy for older people

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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