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Now a days, consumer goods have become the most important part of people lives. Do the advantages of this overweight the disadvantages?

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In
last few decades
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the last few decades
, the living standard of the people has drastically changed. The materialistic approach of new generation has made trade goods a vital part of their
lives
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life
.
However
, there are some demerits of
this
also
. In
this
 essay, I will shed some light on
merits
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the merits
 and demerits of
this
 phenomenon and
then
 provide my own opinion. On the one hand, there are compelling benefits of using
consuconsumer
 items in
oue
of or belonging to us
our
 daily lives. Electronic gadgets
such
 as mobile phones, computers, laptops
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 have made our lives easy and comfortable.
For instance
, if someone
want
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wants
 to buy
appearls
earnest or urgent request
appeals
pearls
 or any other household items, they can purchase them from various E-commerce sites by ordering them
on line
on a regular route of a railroad or bus or airline system
online
. By doing
this
, they not only save their
time but
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time, but
 avoid heavy traffic on roads.
Moreover
, these gadgets can be carried
anywhere anytime
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anywhere, anytime
 without making any special efforts. These products are available on various shopping sites at lesser price compared to retail stores.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages of people relying on consumer goods on day to day basis.
First
 of all, these of items
badly affects
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badly affect
 the
socials
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social
 lives of individuals,. People indulge themselves in these technological inventions
bso
to a very great extent or degree
so
 deeply by surfing various social networking sites which in turn demolishes the need of personal interaction with society.
Moreover
, to purchase
there
of them or themselves
their
item
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items
, some people use
installment method
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the instalment method
instalment method
 or debit/credit cards.
Consequently
, they
sccum
consent reluctantly
succumb
 themselves into heavy debts. To conclude, I firmly agree that merits of consumer products in
daily lives
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the daily lives
 outweigh the drawbacks. Consumer items can save a person's time and enrich them with flexible lifestyle.

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