10.B. Some people think restoration of the old building takes huge amount of the government expenditure. It would be more beneficial to use this money for the development of new roads and buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Ancient buildings and constructions are considered as a holder of a certain tradition and a place of

tourist

attraction. The maintenance of

this

old building requires huge

government

budget which

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budget, which

, some people think, should be diverted to the

construction

of the new roads and buildings. In my opinion, though it is imperative to spend on

old

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the old construction

construction

, I believe governments should focus more on the creation of the new infrastructure. Undoubtedly, renovation of the antique building is necessary to make the place a

tourist

attraction.

However

, will it be possible without improving the basic infrastructure of that country? To

illustrate suppose

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illustrate, suppose

historical

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historic

old building, where

government

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the government

has spent for

renovation

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the renovation

may able

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may, able

to draw attention of

lot

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a lot

lots

tourist

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tourists

within and across the border but roads are not well developed to go to visit the building.

As a result

this

is obvious that the

tourist

will be

demotivated

to go there, and

consequently

, the motive of

government

spending will be futile.

Therefore

government

should carefully divert the money for the

construction

of the new road and building.

Furthermore

, developed roads and modern buildings are not only considered as

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indicator of

country’s development but

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a country’s development, but

a country’s development but

the country’s development but

also

act as a

boaster

a person who backs a politician or a team etc.

booster

of a country’s economy either directly or indirectly.

For example

well developed transport system

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the well developed transport system

a well developed transport system

favorably

showing approval

favourably

conducive to the expansion of the business, which

consequently

contributes to the economy.

In addition

, when portion

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, when a portion

of money, previously used for restoration of the old historical buildings, diverted to the

construction

of new roads and buildings, will expedite the development even

further

Thus

diverting the spending from renovation of old buildings to

construction

Suggestion

the construction

of new Roads and building is far more beneficial. In conclusion,

although

expenditur

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in age old historical buildings seems beneficial, diverting

this

expenditure to the

construction

of new roads and buildings will undeniably be more beneficial for the country

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10.B. Some people think restoration of the old building takes huge amount of the government expenditure. It would be more beneficial to use this money for the development of new roads and buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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