You recently went on a trip with a friend and you both took some photographs. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Ask your friend to send you a particular photograph Explain why you need that particular photograph Tell your friend what happened to your copy of it Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Brendan,
Dear Brendan,
How is it going after our vacation? I'm writing
this
letter to ask you a favour!
Can you send me one of our photographs? I would like to receive that one we took at the central beach when the sun was shining bright orange over the sea. We were so happy at that moment, but, fortunately, we remembered to take a photo.
I'm asking this
because I really loved that one photo, the orange colour of the sun mixed with the blue sky resulted in a wonderful view. Consequently
, I'm thinking about doing a painting of that to put in my room. Thus
, I'll be able to look at it every day when I wake up and remember that beautiful view and our trip.
Badly, I had trouble with my computer yesterday and, to my bad fortune, I lost most part of the photos we took on the trip. I'd be so grateful if you do this
for me!
Best wishes,
DaniSubmitted by danielejaegger on
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Greeting and Closing
The letter effectively opens and closes with appropriate greetings and sign-off, thus scoring high in greeting and closing. A small point of improvement could be to add a more personalized touch or expression of warmth at the start and end.
Logical Structure
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Single Idea per Paragraph
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Complete Response
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Suitable Writing Tone
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