Many people work long hours leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages over disadvantages?

Does
one
need some
time
to spend on leisure activities? Unfortunately, people work for extra
hours leaving
Accept comma addition
hours, leaving
very little or no
time
at all for extra activities seems less advantageous.
However
, working for late hours might be considered profitable by an employee to some extent, as
one
could get
extra wage
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extra wages
an extra wage
for his extra hours of work. A bread-winner thinks he could get some more luxuries for his loved ones by working for late hours,
although
, only
employer
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the employer
could get benefit from an employee's long hours of dedication in monetarily terms.
Conversely
, that
person
is compromising on
his both mental and
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both his mental and
physical health.
For instance
,
one
could undergo stress, or someone might face sciatica due to sitting for long hours - especially ones having sedentary jobs. As per a research conducted in
USA
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the USA
there are numerous cases of back-pain patients due to sedentary
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
which is indeed an alarming situation.
Likewise
, committed-to-work
person
could lose his family
time
as well as
time
for oneself. It is as important for an individual to have some “me-
time
” on
daily basis
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a daily basis
as meal thrice a day.
Hence
, if an individual could play some out-door games like tennis, badminton, soccer and cricket;
then
one
could stay fit and healthy both physically and psychologically.
Thus
, mentally and physically fit
person
could be more productive and active against
stressed
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stress
or the
person
who is not in
state
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a state
of good health. To summarize, in the light of
aforementioned points
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the aforementioned points
, working for long hours and leaving very less
time
for leisure activities
have
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has
more disadvantages over advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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