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Some people believe charity organization should only offer help to people of their own countries. Another claim that these organizations should give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both opinions and tell which side do you agree?

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Some people think
charity
 organisations must only help their nation.
Meanwhile others
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Meanwhile, others
 believe that these
charity
 assemblies should offer assistance to necessitous people regardless of where they live. I concur
this
 view as it assists all needy individuals without any discrimination. On the one hand, many people believe that
charity
Suggestion
charitable
 institutions have to support their own country and they claim
this
 by helping another indigent nation.
However
, they may encourage it to develop a dependency on aid rather than solve their problem.
In other words
, they are
training
the act of changing or reversing the direction of the course
turning
 it to tackle their domestic issue. As the past has shown, some countries started to depend on aids they got from charities
such
 as Somalia.
Although
 it is true, I still believe that the assistances should not grant indigenous. Regarding the supports, they can be given in the form of training
of
Suggestion
on
 how to fix their troubles.
On the other hand
, others reckon that the help has to be given to pauper individuals despite where they are. Through funding the impecunious country, wealthy countries gain benefits.
For instance
, the United Arab Emirates has been
investigating
Suggestion
investigated
 in many developing countries
such
 as Sudan, and due to
this
 investment, it increases economic growth.
That is
 the reason why I side with
this
 opinion as both countries earn interest from the assistance. To sum up,
charity
 institutions ought to assist impoverished people without any segregation and solve the negative effect that can develop from it as the dependency relying on aids;
also
 through sage funding, both nations gain profit.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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