some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree?

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Modern world today

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Many governments spend a huge amount of

money

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for the uplifting of the arts.

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However

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there are some people think

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money

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could have been used for the benefit of the mankind.

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Any

opinion

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I completely agree with the opinion as there are more pressing issues required to be tackled.

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one principle reason to believe that spending

money

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on for the arts is a futile initiatives because in many

countries people

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countries, people

are in the need of the basic facilities.

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the tax which they collected from their citizen could return to them by providing

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better

the best

facilities.Take India as an example

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the government

allocate

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allocates

funds for the development of

folkular

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academy and various

folks

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folk

arts

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Even though these arts are

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the verge of extinction

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there are many poverty stricken families are out there and their difficulties and problems have to be sorted out before looking into the protection of the

folks

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folk

arts

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art

forms. It is,

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, obvious that the government ought to consider

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society's

societies'

requirements before any arts.

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, another point to consider is that, in

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electronic era

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there is no need to spend

money

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on the

art

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since there are many entertainments are available for the people.

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the

kadakali

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an old

art

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form which was excited in Kerala, nowadays

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perform

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performs

only in the temple during the time of

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the festival

as viewers are minimum to enjoy

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art

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form.From

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it is evident that there is no point in investing

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these items.People are more interested in electronic games and programs.

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the society won't

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benefit

from providing financial support to the

art

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and related area as

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would not bring any revenue to the public

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moreover

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tax payer

money

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could not reach in the useful hand.

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I strongly against the idea of arts enhancement. In summary, I consider in do not allocate the funds for the arts

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provide the basic facilities to the common man.It is advised that the government should be

prioritise

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prioritised

prioritized

the task

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which means

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offering

basic facilities to the public

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rather than the

art

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reforming.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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enriching society
promoting cultural understanding
development of talent
creative industries
economic benefits
generate revenue
cultural heritage
identity
prioritize spending
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