International tourism has become a huge industry in the world. Do the problems of international travel outweigh its advantages?

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In recent days, due to an advancement
on
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in
the ways of transportation and the absence of strict borders that facilitate the interaction between population, a growing number of travellers are taking the opportunity to discover the entire world.
Althought
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Although
these
experience
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experiences
could result in an enrichment of one’s culture, the negative aspects that international travel can have especially on local populations need to be considered. In my opinion, I believe that overseas travelling can bring about more advantages compared to any disadvantages it might cause. Admittedly, various are the advantages that travelling abroad can have.
Firstly
, from the point of view of travellers it can result in the
aquisitition
the act of contracting or assuming or acquiring possession of something
acquisition
of some skills that only a
globetrottering
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globe-trotting
person can have
such
as an improvement in the communication with other cultures, the opportunity of open one’s mind, a tendency to accept the risk and the unknown.
Secondly
, it is beneficial even for the populations that host foreign travellers, especially
for
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in
undeveloped countries where tourism is the only source of
sustainement
in
absence
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the absence
of other businesses.
On the other hand
, despite the advantages mentioned above, an excess of international travel can have some
drawbaks
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
. One potential problem is the negative impact that it can have on the environment.
For instance
, long distance flights or cargos are the most harmful ways of
trasport
move something or somebody around; usually over long distances
transport
due to the high amount of emissions that they produced.
Moreover
, in some countries, travellers are disrespectful
againts
in contact with
against
the environment or the foreign culture and its attractions. A recent example that
need
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needs
to be considered, is the decision of the Australian government to not allow the climbing of Uluru, the symbol of the Aboriginal culture. In conclusion, despite the fact that international travel can
impacts
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impact
negatively on the environment and local populations, the experience that foreign travellers can gain and the profit that local communities can obtain are far more significant that the disadvantages it presents.
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