There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

In today's
world there
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world, there
are various
kind
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kinds
of
music
available.
Music
is essential for each and every individual living in the
world
.
Moreover
, conventional
music
of the nation is more valuable than the International
music
which is popular in the
world
nowadays
Music
plays
crucial role
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a crucial role
in every
persons
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person's
life. As people shares
there
of them or themselves
their
feelings with the help of
music
.
Infact
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In fact
, most researchers in
world
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the world
claims
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claim
that
music
helps the individuals to get relax as well as it is more like medicine to some peoples.
For example
, there are
institute
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an institute
institutes
which
provide
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provides
this
music
therapy to solve the problem of the individual. Without
music
is the life is meaningless. Whereas, conventional
music
of the
country
is more valuable than International
music
because it represents the culture of the nation.
People
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The people
of the
country
like to listen and enjoy the traditional
music
because
music
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the music
consist
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consists
some meaning and
also
represents there the culture. In the
world
, each
country
have
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has
there
of them or themselves
their
own traditional
music
. In my opinion, there are different types of
music
availabe
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
in the
world but
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world, but
people like the
country traditional
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country, traditional
music
and each every person living in the
world
is connected to the
music
in some or the other way.
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