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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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In today's
world there
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world, there
 are various
kind
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kinds
 of
music
 available.
Music
 is essential for each and every individual living in the
world
.
Moreover
, conventional
music
 of the nation is more valuable than the International
music
 which is popular in the
world
 nowadays
Music
 plays
crucial role
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a crucial role
 in every
persons
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person's
 life. As people shares
there
of them or themselves
their
 feelings with the help of
music
.
Infact
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In fact
, most researchers in
world
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the world
claims
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claim
 that
music
 helps the individuals to get relax as well as it is more like medicine to some peoples.
For example
, there are
institute
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an institute
institutes
 which
provide
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provides
this
music
 therapy to solve the problem of the individual. Without
music
 is the life is meaningless. Whereas, conventional
music
 of the
country
 is more valuable than International
music
 because it represents the culture of the nation.
People
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The people
 of the
country
 like to listen and enjoy the traditional
music
 because
music
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the music
consist
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consists
 some meaning and
also
 represents there the culture. In the
world
, each
country
have
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has
there
of them or themselves
their
 own traditional
music
. In my opinion, there are different types of
music
availabe
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
 in the
world but
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world, but
 people like the
country traditional
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country, traditional
music
 and each every person living in the
world
 is connected to the
music
 in some or the other way.
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