Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some would argue that exchange
program
benefit to all adolescent students.
While
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
Well
, there is a possibility of
students
Suggestion
student
misbehavior
improper or wicked or immoral behavior
misbehaviour
due to freedom away from home.
However
, I believe that student’s get an opportunity to explore
new
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a new culture
new cultures
culture
, learn new things about
life
and develop as a person. These opportunities outweigh the drawback. When students are away from
home they
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home, they
often badly behaved, get into trouble with teachers and guardians because students are not under the supervision of their parents and
this
newly found freedom can lead to delinquency.
For example
, when I was in France at the age of 16, I was not with my family. I along with my friends drink alcohol for the
first
time.
However
,
this
does not mean that exchange
program
is not worthy, but it is better for all the student comes under strict supervision during the
program
. Attending
program
in a new country given an opportunity
to
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for
students to get to know about
new
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new cultures
a new culture
culture
and embrace the new tradition and
way
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a way
of
life
of a new place through the students they live with. Exploring
new
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the new culture
culture
and tradition open eyes of any person and exploring
new dimension
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a new dimension
new dimensions
of
life
and perspective about
life
.
For example
, when I was studying my MBA in India, one of my friends told me to explore
Hindu spiritual path
Suggestion
the Hindu spiritual path
a Hindu spiritual path
. I visited Himalayas to explore
spiritual path
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a spiritual path
with the help of meditation and yoga,
this
experience helped me to discover myself and it changed my
life
. In conclusion,
this
program
gives an opportunity to students to explore
new
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new cultures
a new culture
culture
and embrace
new idea
Suggestion
a new idea
the new idea
new ideas
of
life
by meeting new people, all these opportunities outweigh the drawback of
misbehavior
improper or wicked or immoral behavior
misbehaviour
, while studying in a foreign country.
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