In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this overweigh the disadvantages?

In several countries, numerous parents
are prefering
Suggestion
prefer
are preferring
are preparing
to self taught their children at
home
rather than sending them to school.
This
essay will argue that advantages of
this
outweighs
disadvantages
Suggestion
Disadvantages
.
This
essay will demonstrate that educating children at
home
provide opportunity for self paced learning and it
also
saves
lot
Suggestion
lots
of money, followed by an analysis of how the primary disadvantage of lack of resources at
home
can hinder growth of other skills, is not valid.
Tha
Suggestion
The
main reason to educate children at
home
is that it provides
childern
a young person of either sex
children
an environment where they can learn
thing
Suggestion
a thing
things
on their
on
belonging to or on behalf of a specified person (especially yourself); preceded by a possessive
own
pace.
This
makes them less pressurized and can acquire deeper understanding of the subject before moving on to other things.
For example
, a study done by Cambridge University found that 80% of the students who were educated at
home
by their parents have clearer fundamental knowledge as compared to those who went to school. Studying at
home
also
saves
lot
Suggestion
lots
of money, as
education
fees
nowdays
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
are expensive. Parents can save money for
future
Suggestion
the future
, to send their kids to college, which is even more expensive than school
education
. To illustrate, in countries
such
as Norway and Holland, 60% students who received
education
Suggestion
an education
at
home
, do not take
education
loan to attend college. Those opposed to
this
say that, schools provide numerous other facilities like playground area, music rooms
etc
that is
not available at
home
and
this
could hamper overall development of children.
However
, there are numerous places which provide
such
facilities and parents can pay and take their kids.
Moreover
,
lot
Suggestion
lots
a lot
of schools in India and China doesn't have these facilities and parents send their kids to places where they can learn other skills like swimming, music etc. On balance, the fact that educating children at
home
provide them secure environment and time to learn things at their own pace outweighs the demerits of lack of resources at
home
which can
hampers
Suggestion
hamper
children's holistic development.

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