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Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will provide better care for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While some parents believe that their children get the best
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 and support from
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Playschools
, others are of the opinion that grandparents are the best caretakers. I totally agree with the
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 view. Grandparents take good
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 of their grandchildren because they love them. They are their flesh and blood and
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 a good reason to shower them with love and
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.
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, grandparents are much more than caretakers.
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 taking
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 of their grandchildren, they help the babies to develop their social and language skills.
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, the blood relationship between them help better bonding and create an overall healthy atmosphere, which in turn foster better growth and character formation.
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, a recent research found that babies who spend a considerable amount of time with their parents or
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grandparents to learn
 things much faster. As for
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play schools
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 centres, they are run for monetary benefits. The vast majority of these institutions are not all that concerned about the well-being of the kids. Many of them accommodate 20 to 25 kids at a time and that makes it difficult for them to attend to the needs of all children. The pre-school age is extremely crucial for the intellectual and emotional development of children. Since babies tend to learn a lot during
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 period, it is important for them to receive individual
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 and attention. Unfortunately, preschools and day
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 centres often fail to address these needs. To conclude, in order to ensure the overall development of children, it is important to understand and acknowledge their needs like a grandparent or parent does. Since pre-schools are profit-driven I cannot agree with the argument that they provide the best service for preschool children.
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