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Nowadays, internet and television has given ordinary people a chance to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples

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In today's world, due to the advancement of technology getting fame is much easier than before through the web and television world. Some common person comes to
lamelight
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the limelight
limelight
lame light
 through negative
opionion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
opinions
opening
 on society or
othere issue's
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the other issue's
other issue's
author issue's
. I believe, it is a good positive sign, we get to know many hidden talents in our country with the help of internet and Television. To embark upon, when an ordinary person
place
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places
 an opinion about any issue,
othere
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 people get offended and make him famous by defaming. Everyone's
have
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having
 a different opinion about one particular thing, when someone comment on any
issue it
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issue, it
 gets viral due to
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 questions other's belief system, that person get trolled on
internet
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the internet
 or in news channels eventually become
overnight famous
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famous overnight
.
For example
, In India, ten years ago,
student
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a student
 who was doing her master wrote a letter to government officials about removal of
reservation system
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the reservation system
from
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of
 Indian society as job's cannot be allotted to only few caste people,
this
 letter created an outcry in social media making her famous but in a negative way, people trolled on twitter for many days.
which
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Which
 effected her personal life
alot
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a lot
.
However
, there are some positive sides of
this
 internet and television. These are the only platform to show unique skills to the whole world. There are so many common people made their
carrer
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
careers
 by showcasing their unique talent
on
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in
 social media and
throught
all the way through
throughout
through
thought
 television shows.
For example
, Famous singer Amala Paul got overnight fame through one of the singing reality show and now she is the most popular singer in India. In conclusion, with the help of media and on web, common man get famous for the wrong reason which can
ruined
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ruin
 their life, but at the same time there are many ordinary people who made their mark in
this
 society by their hidden talent.
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