some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however say that this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required.

There are numerous ways of
veveloping
health
. Some
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
that
parciticating
in sports could be
benificial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for
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to
peoples
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people's
health whereas
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health, whereas
others think that not only sports can improve pupils
body but
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body, but
also
thre
in or at that place
there
their
the
are some other ways are needed and
this
essay
agree
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agrees
with
this
view that,
imposting
impressive in appearance
imposing
higher tax on sugary drinks and daily exercises are ultimate ways of constructing public
health
.
To begin
with, increasing sports facilities could have
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
in our
body
.
Firstly
, those who have
small amount
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a small amount
of time after finishing their job has the opportunity to play games with their offspring at home.It is the best way of
weducing
any process in which electrons are added to an atom or ion (as by removing oxygen or adding hydrogen); always occurs accompanied by oxidation of the reducing agent
reducing
fat rather than sitting
ona
located at or attached to
on
chair
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a chair
and watching
televisio
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
.
Secondly
, Sports like football require running
fastly which
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quickly, which
quickly which
could embrace the
fat
an event (or a course of events) that will inevitably happen in the future
fate
fact
of
human
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the human body
body
.If busy parents
pay
participate in games or sport
play
this
game with their
cildren
a young person of either sex
children
at
house
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the house
a house
, it will be helpful for both of their
health
. Other measures are
also
important for maintaining
health
such
as government could impost higher rate of
taxex
charge against a citizen's person or property or activity for the support of government
taxes
on sugary drinks like coca-cola
,
Accept space
,
fanta
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Fanta
etc. The result of
this
will be people avoid these kinds of beverages and eliminate the habit of drinking those drinks.
Moreover
, establishing exercising equipment on home or in the garden could be a great idea which will have a
graet
relatively large in size or number or extent; larger than others of its kind
great
impact on the whole
familys
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family's
family
health
. When a
readymade
made for purchase and immediate use
ready-made
gym is
avilable
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
in your
dooryard
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
nobody will refuse to go in there
.
Accept space
.
This
help
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helps
us a lot in my own family greatly by creating a small gymnasium in our underground.
This
essay
agree
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agrees
that, not only sports facility
have
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has
impact
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an impact
on
humans
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the human body, but
the human body but
human body but
human's body but
body
but
also
further
necessary steps like avoiding
drink
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drinks
with sugar and involving in the gym could have special effect on public
health
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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