8.I. In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is thus necessary for the government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree and disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays there is a growing tendency of
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problems among the general people due to over-consumption of ready made junk foods. Some people believe that to tackle these
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-related issues, the higher
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should be imposed on these foods by the government to make it costly. I think
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is a wrong approach because
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is not the only reason for
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problems, and
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may force people to find alternative ways which may prove equally harmful to our
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.
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, the imposition of a
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upon fast
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in an intention to reduce
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issues,
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, obesity, tiredness, heart disease, will be proved ineffective as other factors are contributing to these
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-related problems.
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, apart from the negative impact of fast
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, a person may
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face
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issues due to lack of proper physical exercise, having imbalanced diets or excessive body weight.
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, restricting consumption of fast
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by imposing increased
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alone is not sufficient to prevent
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problems. The government needs to take a comprehensive step to tackle
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problem. Another important consideration because of a higher
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on fast
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is that it compels people to shift their choice to
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alternative to the fast-
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that is
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equally harmful as fast
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. Even sometimes home-cooked
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which is considered most hygienic and healthy is not produced in a way
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not as healthy and safe as it should be.
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, I personally know a family who is accustomed to using excessive oil and condiments while cooking and take a large amount of red meat which is full of excessive fat in their everyday meal.
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, all the members of the family are obese.
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, it is clear that taxing fast
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is not an effective option to curb
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issues. To conclude, levy higher
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on fast
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to discourage people from having
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food
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is not a viable option to control obesity and other
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-related problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overconsumption
  • Chronic diseases
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Sin tax
  • Subsidize
  • Affordability
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Paternalism
  • Socio-economic disparities
  • Industry lobbying
  • Public health initiatives
  • Consumer behavior
  • Regulatory measures
  • Health-conscious
  • Processed foods
  • Fiscal policy
  • Preventative healthcare
  • Behavioral economics
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