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In the past decade, we have developed new advances in medical services and it is believed by some that in another decade or so computers might take over a vast majority of the traditional medical doctor’s work. Discuss the pros and cons of this advancement and give your opinion about it.

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In previous times, medical care has witnessed significant progress in terms of technological involvement in medicine. It
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 been said by some people that most of the routine medical
practitioner’s
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practitioner
job
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jobs
 may be overtaken by these machines in
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the near
 future.
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 essay will discuss how
technology
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 in the delivery of medical services has been a blessing by prolonging lives and how it may not have helped by
impersonalizing
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 doctor-patient relationship. Diverse advantages have been seen since the advent of
technology
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 in healthcare, most notable of which is the prolongation of human lives. Before the invention of some medical devices, it was noticed that patients who come down with some kinds of
diseases especially
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diseases, especially
 heart conditions usually had little time to live from
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the time
 of diagnosis. To illustrate, the
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Cardiothoracic
 surgery unit of OAUTHC recently collaborated with some Israeli surgeons in replacing defective heart valves of some children using synthetic devices. The survival rate following
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 surgery was found to have increased to five years as compared to the previous two years without the
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 of
manmade
not of natural origin; prepared or made artificially
man-made
 heart valves.
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, it is clear that
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use
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 in
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health care
 may be indispensable in achieving longevity.
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, the
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 of modern devices in medicine may have a deleterious effect on
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the patient - doctor relationship
 by making it somewhat impersonal.
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 is because sometimes part of the healing process of a patient starts when they have contact with their doctor.
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, the
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 of some health apps by some diabetics to monitor control of their blood glucose may reduce their clinic visits and
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 reduce the frequency of contact with their physician. It is
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 clear that the resultant reduced contact with the doctor may cause a strain on their relationship. To conclude,
technology
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 in delivering healthcare services has indeed done more harm than good. It is felt that though
technology
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 may be seen to take over some doctor’s work in
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the near
 future, some of these jobs requiring physical touch may not be completely taken over.

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