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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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It has been argued that
choice
Suggestion
the choice
 of an individual depicts
one
's social
background
 and personality.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
 notion as numerous facts are out there where an individual appear to be different whereas their interest in dresses are different.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will discuss that how matured people select their cloths and appear different from their original personality.
Secondly
,
this
 essay will shadow light on how surrounding and social relation alter their interest. To commence, It has been noticed in among of
young generation
Suggestion
a younger generation
younger generation
the younger generation
 that they begin to quick guess about an individual
background
 and their
character
 by just looking their dressing sense, whereas they entirely put aside the
matureness
the quality of being natural or based on natural principles
naturalness
 fact. People who
has achieved
Suggestion
have achieved
 the older age keep
vast experience
Suggestion
the vast experience
a vast experience
 of life along with nature to adopt
new culture
Suggestion
a new culture
the new culture
.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
with the time they learn the advantages of simplicity.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 it becomes beyond bounds of possibility to guess their social
background
 and
character
.
For instance
, there was in
event
Suggestion
the event
 took place with the great scientist of India Dr. APJ Kalam, in a market he was appeared to be an old man shopping some gift for kids until his identity was not
reveled
make visible
revealed
 by
one
 of fan of him.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
Impact of
one
's
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
 and social relation modify the interest of people, in spite of where to belong to. India is a country with
diversed
many and different
diverse
 religions and,
on the other hand
, it is secular
also
. People from
one
 region move to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 part of country for their bread and butter. They acquire and get accustomed to
new life
Suggestion
a new life
the new life
.
For example
,
one
 is shifted to Canada from India and adopted the condition there. To face the weather there he need to obtain
new dressing sense
Suggestion
a new dressing sense
 which nowhere reveals their culture and
character
. Considering all facts discussed above, I am in
better state
Suggestion
a better state
 to say that dressing sense does not
depicts
Suggestion
depict
 the individual
background
 and
character
.
Choices
Suggestion
The choices
 are tend change
in contrast
 of geography, knowledge, trending fashion
,
Accept space
,
atmosphere and other significant factors.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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