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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
Environment
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The environment
 is one of the most serious problems in the 21st century. There are some ideas that each person can do nothing to ameliorate the situation, if people want to make a
difference
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difference, then
then
 they will have to depend on the government and large companies. From my point of
view
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view, this
this
 is a wrong way to approach and improve the problems. Nowadays, many places on Earth have to deal with a lot of consequences happens because of the all the effects of the environment. Protect the earth is our
responsibililty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
responsibilities
, individuals can make a big difference. In some remote areas, many people don’t know that nylon takes
hundred years
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a hundred years
 to decompose. In the modern world, things like
plastic
 bags has become
a
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an
 essential
items
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item
 and
can not
can not
cannot
 be replaced for many people. Despite of the convenient
this
 is a biggest harmful
resources
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resource
 to the world we’re living. In many places some people still think that the small garbage is not harmful for the environment and clearly they don’t know the real situation. In the latest years, polar ice melting, pollution, and other impacts
has become
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have become
 the phenomenon problems
.
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.
As a result
, the environments
has been destroyed
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have been destroyed
 dramatically.
For example
, if we reduced the number of
plastic
 things, our planet would be greener and better and in the future we will be able to improve the environment.
On the other hand
, some companies could solve the problems. Many factories dump directly the waste into the river and the water supplies leading to many
kind
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kinds
 of pollution. With reasonable measures large scale companies can make a difference. In some countries, with politics on environmental protection of the government, they have
succeeded reducing
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succeeded in reducing
 the amount of
plastic
 waste and minimize the emissions by all the means of transport. Nowadays, in some developing countries, the government
have tried
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has tried
 to find alternative sources of
plastic
 waste. As far as I can concerned, despite the governments and large scale companies
influences
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influence
, the situation will not improve without human action. Having said that,
individuals person
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individual, person
individual person
individuals' person
 can protect and save our planet.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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