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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People have conflicting views with regard to the role of fathers of inventions in
this
 modern world, with some claiming that they are of greater importance than their counterparts who works in medical services.
Although
 various devices and tool have absolutely improved our quality of life throughout history, I still believe that medical workers are much more important than inventors. Perhaps no one can deny the indispensable part of many thousands of medic practitioners, especially at the time of rising outbreak of human infectious disease. A doctor does on a daily basis challenging works,
such
 as surgeries or operations, and gives effective treatment or prescription medicine to patients who are regularly in pain or overly anxious about their health status.
For example
, clinicians can even the life of a person who is on the verge of death due to accidents or fatal illnesses, and bring him back to a normal healthy lifetime.
Moreover
,
such
 public workers tend to be really kind-hearted and humane, and they are willing to attend a variety of community charity programs like blood donation or free health care. From my perspective, I can understand why many hold the view that inventors and creators are at least equally important as those working in medical fields.
Firstly
, inventions
such
 as the computer or smartphone have revolutionized the way we work, study or even entertain. Without
such
 creations, I cannot imagine how our current world would be like and it would be extremely to maintain contact with our friends or acquaintances who reside far from us.
Secondly
, some machines or gadgets are employed in thousands of hospitals or clinics in order to serve the purpose of saving people’s life and it would be so complicated for a doctor to diagnose diseases without the help of modern medic equipment and facilities. Despite those benefits, it is my firm belief that a general practitioner always tries his best to safeguard patients with or without the presence of
such
 medical devices,
thus
 creators or generators will never be able to compare with a medic worker. To summarize, it seems to me that an inventor cannot overpass a doctor in terms of saving lives as well as strenuous work.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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