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Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees this is beneficial

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The world witnessed a lot of diverse developments in the 21st century. One
such
 important development is
globalisation
 and it has influenced every aspect of life. Many people are excited about living in a globalized world, yet a few people believe that globalization is not beneficial. A careful analysis shows that
globalisation
 has both merits and demerits.
Globalisation
 offers us a plethora of merits. The most important one among them is the easy availability of services and products. It is because of
globalisation
, the services or products available only in selected countries are now available around the world.
For example
 an Apple iPhone gets its motherboard and the phone body manufactured in the USA and China respectively.
This
 gets assembled in another
country
 where it is sold.
Globalisation
 has an additional advantage of increasing the employment opportunities in developing and Underdeveloped countries.
Globalisation
also
 helps to reduce the price of products by getting them manufactured in countries where the labour cost is low. On the flip side, the negative aspects of
globalisation
 cannot be wished away / cannot be overlooked. It interferes with the tradition, culture and the way of living of a
country
 in which it is implemented.
Globalisation
 enables multinational companies to exploit the natural resources of poor countries. To consider an example, beverage companies established in India have their presence in river beds. They consume gallons of water and affect the agricultural activity, which is the backbone of the
country
.
Therefore
globalisation
 alters the existing activity in a
country
 to bring in a new service. To recapitulate, even though
globalisation
 has become essential for the ease of living, it
also
 endangers the way of life in many countries.
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