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In some countries young people are encouraged to work r travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Nowadays, a noticeable number of students
lean
gain knowledge or skills
learn
 to take a
gap
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year
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 after they have finished secondary
school
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.
Merits
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The merits
 of
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year
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 could be the experience and/or the amount of money that these youngsters could be able to accumulate during it.
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, it may hold some demerits concerning whether they would continue with their studies after that
year
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 or decide to abandon
education
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 permanently. Both aspects will be discussed in the lines that follow. On the one hand, taking a
gap
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year
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 holds myriad advantages for high
school
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 graduates related to financing their higher
education
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. To illustrate, many teenagers take
this
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year
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 off trying to work and earn enough money that can help them in college.
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, a survey which was conducted by Yale University in the
year
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 2012 showed that nearly 60 % of its subscribers have taken a
gap
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year
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 to collect funds for joining it.
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, a one-
year
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gap
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 before college could help
school
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 graduates
to become
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become
 university students.
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, a
gap
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year
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 can be
of a great disadvantage
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a great disadvantage
 for those who decide to take it.
to
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To
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Accept space
,
 a tremendous drawback perspective for
gap
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 years is that some of the young may choose not to proceed with their
education
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 as they may change their life plans through
this
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 time.
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, a friend of mine chose to continue with his
gap
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-
year
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 career after he had earned what he would have been learning to earn years after.
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, Potential scholars may never reach college if they stop pursuing their educational targets. In conclusion, not only can
gap
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 years hold benefits for secondary
school
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 graduates, but
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 drawbacks.
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, it could assist many of them supporting their
further
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education
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 financially, but It could tempt them away as well if they lost their eagerness to learn.
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