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Some people say now that we can see films on our phones or tablet there is no need to go to the cinemas, others say to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Different people have different preferences regards where to watch films. Some people prefer going to the cinemas while others prefer watching on their phones. From my perspective, I prefer going to the
cinema
. People prefer watching on their phones because mobile phones or tablets are portable so they can be carried around. They can start watching a
movie
, pause the
movie
 to carry out other tasks and continue from they stopped later. Some people
also
 don’t feel the need to conclude watching movies on the spot. They can continue
watching
Suggestion
to watch
 at their convenient time for
days which
Accept comma addition
days, which
 could span into weeks and
some times
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 months depending on the individual. The mobile phones or tablets
also
 have storage which can be used to store a large number of movies so they are at liberty to choose the
movie
 they want to watch at any given time of the day. On
another hand
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the other hand
other hand
, some people are of the opinion that for movies to be maximally enjoyed, movies should be watched in the
cinema
 because the
cinema
 was built to create an enjoyable experience
such
 the quality of the movies shown which is always crystal clear and shown on a very large screen, the sound system, the reclining chairs to make people relax. Most cinemas now employ state of the art technology
such
 as the 3D
googles
tight-fitting spectacles worn to protect the eyes
goggles
 to create
an
Suggestion
a
 un-imaginable experience for the viewers, the adaptive technology of the cinemas to adapt to different weather conditions shown in the
movie
. I strongly believe movies should be seen in the
cinema
 rather than on a mobile phone or a tablet
as a result
 of the enjoyable experience created by the
cinema
.
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