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Most of the world’s problems are caused by overpopulation. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people consider
overpopulation
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 as the main cause of most problems in the world. From my point of view, while many of the world’s issues are caused by
overpopulation
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, I believe that most problems that people are facing already existed before the world’s
population
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 explosion. It is a proven fact that many problems exist due to
overpopulation
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.
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,
overpopulation
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 puts a strain on the planet’s natural resources. As people need fuel for their cars, an increasing number of people has increased the demand for fossil fuels,
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 as oil and gas. These resources are unrenewable, and
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overpopulation
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 will inevitably lead to the depletion of
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 resources quicker, potentially causing an energy crisis.
Secondly
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, a dense
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 means a decline in the quality of people’s lives. Life in big cities,
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 as Beijing, is a good example of
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 as there is not enough space to accommodate everyone, with lower-class families having to live in very cramped housing.
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, many issues are inherent in human society, regardless of
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 size. War,
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, has existed since humans lived in tribes with only a small number of people.
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, war brings strife and destruction to societies.
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, discrimination based on race, gender and social standing has plagued millions of individuals, even though these issues are unrelated to the size of the
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.
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, it is inaccurate to say that over-
population
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 is the main culprit behind most of mankind’s problems. In conclusion,
overpopulation
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 can cause many problems to society and individuals,
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, there are other factors involved as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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