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Modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children in the past. Do you agree or disagree?

#lifestyles #parents #time #children #attention
Discoveries of technology and the development of
world
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the world
has
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have
impact
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an impact
 on
people
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peoples
 behaviour and their lifestyle.So, parents are busy with their work on employment field and now they have
tiny amount
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a tiny amount
tiny amounts
 of
time
 to spare with
thier
of them or themselves
their
three
 children.Which has
harmful effect
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harmful effects
a harmful effect
 on child behaviour.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
this
 statement that, in current
lifestyles children
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lifestyles, children
 do not get proper guidelines from their parents as they had in the previous decade.
To begin
 with, now people have long working hour and they have to take
rest
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a rest
 when come back in home.
As a result
, parents
does not have
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do not have
huge
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a huge time
time
 to
spent
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spend
 with their kids, while in
last
decades they
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decades, they
 had
short
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shorter
 times
on
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at
to
for
 work and spend most of the
time
 with their children.
This
 is
happened
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happening
 for opening various companies which
creates
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create
 lots of employability.
For example
, our previous generation had passed much more
time
 with parents because at that
time
 people did not often find a job which compel them to consumed times with their children.
Furthermore
, working overtime to meet family expenses has an impact on parents lifestyles.Now, they have to do work on extra
time
 to carry their family consumption.As a consequence, children do not get the opportunity to
passing
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pass
 most of the moments with parents.
Wheather
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Whether
, in previous term a child grew up with got the proper guidelines from their parents because there were few vacancies of doing
job
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the job
a job
.
In addition
, demands of education isolated children from their father and mother.Because, now they have to be passing more
time
 on educational institutions rather than at home. To conclude, I believe that if
parent
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a parent
the parent
 gives more
time
 to their children, it will be develop their mental and physical well beings.
Thus
, in current situation little
time
 spent with
child
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children
the child
 has
detrimental effect
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a detrimental effect
for
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in
 the long run.
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