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Some people prefer to spend most of their time with friends. Other people prefer to be alone most of the time. Which way of life do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

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friends can be enjoyable. There is a
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 to be alone,
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, and to think seriously without the input of others. Relaxing alone at home is a good
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 to think about something important or enjoyable without interference from other people.
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, solitude is an aid to creativity. Many good ideas occur when one sits alone and lets one's mind wander. The result may be valuable new insight. The chemist who worked out the structure of the benzene ring,
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, had that particular idea
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 sitting in front of a fireplace. Would that idea
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 occurred to him if he had been sitting with friends in a noisy tavern? At
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 moments of creativity, company may be the
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 thing anybody desires. Consider the story of British poet Samuel Taylor Coleridge, who composed his famous poem "Kabula Khan" in its entirety in his mind and was ready to put the poem on paper when received
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 unexpected visitor. The visitor soon departed, but
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 Coleridge had forgotten
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 of the poem. He was able to recall and record only bits and pieces of it. Those fragments became one of the best-known poems in English.
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, what must the original work have been like? We will never know, because an unwanted company distracted the poet as he was about to write it down.
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, companionship may have its own benefits, but so does
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 spent alone; and
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 group activity may be fun, solitude yields deeper and more lasting rewards.
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introduction conclusion present
Consider adding a clear introduction that introduces the topic and your preference.
introduction conclusion present
Ensure the conclusion summarizes your main points effectively, connecting back to the introduction.
relevant specific examples
You have provided relevant and specific examples to support your points.
logical structure
Your essay presents a logical progression of ideas with strong supporting points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preference
  • solitude
  • social skills
  • emotional support
  • self-reflection
  • personal growth
  • sense of belonging
  • mental health
  • sense of community
  • concentration
  • productivity
  • lasting memories
  • creativity
  • perspective
  • original thought
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