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Women should have an equal role alongside men in both police and armed forces. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In today's modern world, feminism is one of the widely discussed
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. It aims to have equality
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in division, with shares to each
amongst
 men and women in all aspects of
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the work environment
work environment
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with
 reference to equal pay, opportunities, recognition and no discrimination based on gender. A recently conducted survey says that women are paid less than men in every field, regardless of having same knowledge or experience. In armed forces or in police the training given is same regardless of gender. If a woman manages to score more or equal to her male counterpart, she should be given the same footing as him in the
force
the front of the human head from the forehead to the chin and ear to ear
face
. To conclude, women should have an equal role alongside men in police and armed forces based on how they score on their trainings.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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