The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

The bar chart illustrates the

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of mobile

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sales

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by five major companies namely:

Samsung

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, Apple,

Nokia

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, LG,

ZTE

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.

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,

Samsung

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and

Nokia

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were the most popular brands on the market.

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,

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the

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number

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of

Samsung

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, Apple,

ZTE

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and ZTE

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had increased over the period, the

number

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of

phones

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phone

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sales

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sold

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by

Nokia

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and LG had decreased. In 2009, there are

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Nokia’s

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Nokia

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phone

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sales

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than

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Samsung’s

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Samsung

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.

Samsung

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sold nearly

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250

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units

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,

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Nokia

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sold close to 450

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units

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.

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, by 2013, there was a sharp fall in the

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of

phone

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sales

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by

Nokia

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from over 400

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units

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to 250

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units

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and

Samsung

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’s

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figures

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overtaken to reach the highest point at around 450

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units

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. At the beginning of the period, around 25

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of

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Apple’s mobile

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was sold in the world and

it

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which

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was the lowest

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. LG sold more than 100

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mobile phones in the world in 2009 but there was a moderate

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from over 100

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units

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to under 100

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units

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. The

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of

phone

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sales

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by Apple saw a considerable rise with the highest point around 150

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units

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while

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ZTE’s

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figures increased slightly over the period.