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children's education is expensive. In some countries, the government pays some or all the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

#children #education #countries #government #costs
Education
 plays a significant role in any countries
improvementioned
 and it is
important aspect
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an important aspect
 of
individuals life
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an individual's life
individual's life
the individual's life
individual life
individuals' life
.In some
nations the
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nations, the government
government
 itself pays for studies for the students because
education
 is expensive over there.In the present essay I would suggest some of
positives
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the positives
 and negatives of
such
 condition. In my opinion advantages are more than disadvantages. To start with
,
Accept space
,
I would like to
tell
express in words
say
 that It is
responsibility
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the responsibility
a responsibility
 of
government
 to pay for
education
 as people are paying taxes and avenues so it is
duty
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the duty
a duty
 of the country to provide free
education
 to the students.We cannot
denie
declare untrue; contradict
deny
 the fact
,
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,
development of people is the development of the nation.
Secondly
,
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,
so many folks are not able to send their children to school because of
poor financial status
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the poor financial status
 of the family.So many
youngers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
 could not able to do
further
 studies.
This
 brings not only literacy Rate to increase the countries economic rate
also
 gets affected.So
government
 should give free
education
 to all. But it is two sides
for
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of
to
 everything. If nation give free
education
 to all it may a burden to the
government
 of the country As giving free
studis
the territory occupied by one of the constituent administrative districts of a nation
states
 to everyone is a big aspect.Here the
education
 authorities can take measures to give option for whose who can pay should pay the fees. To conclude
,
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,
I would like to say there is always more advantages than disadvantages.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic disparities
  • government funding
  • educational institutions
  • enhanced quality of education
  • educated workforce
  • boosting the economy
  • dependency
  • bureaucracy
  • innovation
  • flexibility
  • parental involvement
  • financially responsible
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