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In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can art tell us about life that science and technology cannot?

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 modern era of continual scientific and technological advancement, artists are still gaining a lot of respect from people the world over. There are a number of things about
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 that the arts can teach us that science and technology fail to. Many forms of art, especially literature, can deliver messages about the appreciation of what we have in
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 as well as
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 itself. Hundreds of literary works depict misery, misfortune and sorrow that still exist in
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 today, and
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 sends a strong message to those who do not appreciate their lives. “The Goldfinch”,
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, which narrates a story about the miserable
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 of the main character after the unfortunate death of his mother makes us wonder whether we have become heartless toward our own loved ones. I doubt that there are any technologies in the world that could manage to convey
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 a powerful message.
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The arts
 teach us to cherish the beauty of
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 and is the fuel for our spiritual lives.
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 is extremely important in a world where science and technology seem to fade our belief in the gravity of
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 in daily
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. The connection between art and
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 is boundless, and traditional music and ancient paintings can remind us of where we came from and who we are.
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 to say, our cultural identity is preserved in various forms of art.
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 science and technology advance our understanding of all things and better our lives,
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the arts
 can
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impart skills or knowledge to
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 us to a much deeper extent, help us value what we have, and remind us of the significance of our
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subjective perspective
  • emotional depth
  • human experiences
  • cultural insight
  • historical context
  • social commentary
  • creativity and innovation
  • self-expression
  • personal narratives
  • critical thinking
  • alternative viewpoints
  • sense of wonder
  • diverse human experiences
  • identity
  • inner world
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