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Technology has a positive effect on education. Do you agree or disagree?

#technology #effect #education
Technology
has greatly affect
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has greatly affected
 our educational awareness nowadays.Many students strongly depend on these new technologies in everyday study
,
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,
especially the academic study would require high and updated information which can be acquired through the internet.I adopt the stance that
technology
 has effectively changed the educational system
into
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in
 a smart way for students who receive.
this
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This
 topic will explain why
technology
 is important in our educational systems
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.
To begin
 with
,
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,
artificial intelligence has become essential in daily live using.
In other words
,
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,
these modern gadgets saved our times without any tiring
at
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in
 searching in order to get the information we need.
Furthermore
, all
post graduate
of or relating to studies beyond a bachelor's degree
postgraduate
 students who have to collect many resources for their
maters
United States poet (1869-1950)
Masters
 or PHD
would
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Would
 become
more easier
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easier
 than
last
 decades.
this
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This
 shows that these cutting edge tools facilitate and enable new prospects for our study.
Furthermore
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,
many countries tend to imitate
other nations
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the other nations
 in their ways of educational and extracurricular systems
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,
especially these new ways that based on virtual learning.
Moreover
,
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,
this
 e-learning system enables many of disabled and international student to take part in these courses and get a certificate as
wel
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
well
.
For example
,
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,
many of universities
such
 as Cambridge make courses for the international students unless their attendance is a must.
Hence
,
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,
these programs
can not
can not
cannot
 be done one day if we do not have modern
technology
. Having manifested the aforementioned reasons and examples, it can be concluded that
technology
 is our major breakthrough which we can rely on for better
eduaction
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
.
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.
many
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Many
 people and I think that if we apply
technology
 in our educational systems properly
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,
it will become
such
 a great evolution in our systems and mindsets

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