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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Global warming has been increasing concern all over the world because mankind is depleting nature in different ways. Both individual and
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government
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governments
 can take necessary measures to solve
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 issue.
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, human being activities have various bad effects on earth’s nature. These activities include gas emission from factories, pollution from vehicles, garbage waste thrown in recycling, etc. Despite that, people use products
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 as air conditioner, refrigerators for their own
convenience but
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convenience, but
 ignoring the effects of these products have on the environment. The
government
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 should take essential actions to address
environment
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environmental
 issues. The
government
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 could impose taxes on vehicle drivers to reduce the crowd in cities along with pollution.
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, in the UK, especially in London city, local municipality imposed green taxes on vehicles who drive
inside
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in
 the city. Public transportation should be improved by increasing the services of buses, trains, etc. An individual should participate in the cause of
climate
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 changes. People should give emphasis to cycling and even decrease flying and driving
on
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of
 vehicles, which means importance should be given to battery cars. If the public try to do recycling properly and consume eco- friendly goods, it can lead to a reduction in
climate
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 changes to some extent. As a living being,
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 is our moral responsibility to protect nature.
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, companies should reduce use eco- friendly way to avoid the emission of carbon dioxide gases in the atmosphere, which means solar, wind energy should be utilized more. In conclusion, the
climate
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 has been drastically
changing
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changed
 because of the effect of pollution and
gobal
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
global
 warming. While the
government
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 can appear stricter towards
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, individuals might show more careful and alert
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 to save the
earth
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earth's
climate
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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