You have just heard some good news about your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how you heard the news • arrange a time to visit your friend at his/her house • explain what you will bring with you

Dear Ashraf, How are you? At
first
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,first

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I want to express my happiness
for
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with

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the good news I had heard about you, and let me congratulate you
for
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on

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the new
baby
. I was known that you have got a new
baby
when our common friend Ibrahim met me in the morning
in
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at

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the bus station and I asked him about you, he was very
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glad

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glade
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glad

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to tell me that good news. I ask you to permit me
visiting
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to visit

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you at your home. I am very interesting to take a glance
on
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at

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the new
baby
and your wife, I will visit you
next
Friday at 8pm if
this
time is not suitable for you please inform me when I can visit you. I would be proud to bring a gift for the
baby
. it will be the
first
gift u being for him, it
contain
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a new shirt, cap and pair of socks.
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the
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to the

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baby
`s gift I will bring
pocket
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a pocket

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of flowers for your wife. I look forward to
see
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seeing

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you soon.
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Yours

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Your
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sincerely Ahmed
shawky
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shaky

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  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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  • however
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