At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent times, a large number of countries have increased the population of youths than they did the elderly. I believe
this
will improve the technological advancement of the
country
, which will in turn boost economic development and it is more than any drawback that may be considered. Despite the demerits mentioned below, I think technology will advance greatly if the young ones are more in a
nation
.
Firstly
, the youngsters are able to use computer gadgets adequately and they can surf the internet to get any information needed.
Secondly
, the young adults, usually, have excellent critical thinking abilities, which will enable them to manage difficult situations that may arise. They carry out tasks with minimal supervision and can bring a contract deal to a close in record time.
Lastly
, the economy of the
nation
will experience a boost because the workers are fresh and agile.
For example
, the Chief executive officer of Globacom telecommunication network, Chief Mike Adenuga, who is 92 years old, when he handed over his company to his son, Mike Adenuga junior, who is 44 years old, the company experienced a great increase in their profit margin. Admittedly, there are some basic drawbacks that can be seen when there are few senior citizens in a
country
. One problem is that there might be increased in crime.
In other words
, the rate of criminal activities would be high because there are no elders to counsel or channel the energy of the youngsters to a more productive one.
This
could be detrimental to the
country
in the long run. Another negative aspect, is that the history and culture of the
nation
would go into extinction.
This
is because there would not be anyone to pass down the cultural heritage to the
next
generation, who are supposed to be the elders in the future.
For example
, the people of Abada village, in Delta State, Nigeria, have lost the technique of healing people with fracture using local herbs because the youths have all left the countryside to the city for greener pastures. In conclusion, the benefit that the advancement in technology and the economy boost a
country
will gain if there are more young people residing there far outweighs any downside that
nation
may face
as a result
of fewer senior citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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