Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Over the
last
few years, there has been
significant increase
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a significant increase
in the number of people travelling to new places where climate conditions are extreme like Sahra desert or Antartica. They want to explore
such
places where tourists are less
comparatively
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comparable
and are fine with risks that comes along. Travelling to
such
places
have
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has
both advantages and disadvantages. One of the biggest benefit is to experience the untouched beauty and having the thrill to be able to successfully complete the tough journey. For a lot of people, travelling is a passion and it gives the immense happiness.
Instead
of travelling to common / touristy places, they prefer to explore the unexplored and are totally aware of the risks associated with
such
places. It has resulted in
tourism industry
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the tourism industry
to grow like anything and they come up with attractive offers. On the flip side,
difficulty
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difficult
journeys can be extremely dangerous. Things can go against the plan. Since the nature is unpredictable, one might experience extreme weather conditions for which he/she is not prepared. So many
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
have lost their lives while trekking and a lot go missing and they could never be traced. Tracing the missing people is an expensive affair in itself. Another drawback is that they might unknowingly destroy the habitat like polar bears in
antartica
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Antartica
are experiencing heat because of the rise in
number
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the number
of tourists. To conclude, difficult journeys are
dangerous so
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dangerous, so
proper care / instructions
needs
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need
to be taken. People have to mentally and physically strong. No doubt that completing
such
journeys is an experience in itself.

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