Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The gifts
are depend
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depend
are depending
on ages of people,
whom
the person or persons that; the one that
who
are given
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has given
gives
is giving
to,
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as toys for children and dresses for old lady.
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, some people believe that the best gifts for teenagers are
money
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.
However
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, others people disagree. I strongly agree with the statement and discuss both
point
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points
of view. For teenagers, giving
money
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for them is
very good idea
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a very good idea
because most parents or others people do not know their preference. From my experience, my mom gave me a lamp for reading some books, which is not necessary for me because the LED light in my room is enough to read a book. If the parents give them
money
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, not only they can buy something that they
want but
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want, but
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save some
money
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in the bank to use it in the future.
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, some people do not like
this
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idea. Not only teenager’s
money
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managing skill is very
poor but
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poor, but
also
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do not think about saving
money
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.
This
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reason may make some parents not allow to give
money
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as a gift for their children. Despite the best gift for teenagers,
money
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still is not given as the gifts by some people.
On the other hand
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, if parents give them
money
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for a present, they can buy something that they prefer and practice
money
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managing skill. Sadly, most teenagers cannot manage about using
money
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that is
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why some parent disagree
to
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with
this
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idea.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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