Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The gifts, which are given, depend on
ages
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the ages
of the receiver
such
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as toys for children and dresses for old lady.
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, some people believe that the best gifts for teenagers are
money
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.
On the contrary
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, others people disagree. I strongly agree with the statement and discuss both points of view. Because of unknowing teenager’s preference, giving
money
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for teenager as gifts is very good idea for the parents. If parents give them
money
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, not only they can buy something that they
want but
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want, but
also
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save some
money
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in the bank to use it in the future. From my experience, I can improve my
money
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management by
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method.
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, some people do not like
this
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idea. From my experience, most teenagers financial management is very poor and they do not think about saving
money
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.
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reason
make
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makes
some parent not allow to give
money
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as a gift for their children. Despite the best gift for teenagers,
money
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is still not given as the gifts by some people.
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, if parents give them
money
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for a present, they can buy something that they prefer and practice
money
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managing skill. Sadly, most teenagers cannot manage about using
money
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that is
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why some parent disagree
to
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with
this
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idea.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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