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Would you like to live a long, calm life until 100 years old or would you prefer a shorter life but much more intense. Decide and explain your reasons.

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The majority people are trying to live
long
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a long time
time
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 with a peace till 100 years old. On
other side
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the other side
, few people believe that
living short
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short time living
time
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life
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 with a lot of great memories. In my opinion, I wanted to be staying longer
life
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. I will illustrate with probable reasons to elaborate
further
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. It is a great
oppurtunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
 given by
god
the supernatural being conceived as the perfect and omnipotent and omniscient originator and ruler of the universe; the object of worship in monotheistic religions
God
 to live as human. We have to take
this
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 as a gift to live long term.
Ofcourse
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Of course
,
Every one
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Everyone
 faces a lot
of
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Of
 problems in their
life
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 which is the reason we prefers short
time
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 live with all beautiful memories. But, we have to take both happy and sad moments in
same manner
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the same manner
.
Life
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 is not a peace of cake to get
awesome taste
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an awesome taste
 at all times. When you have good
healthy
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health
 and wealthy
life
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, we can live 100 years.
However
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, you never know when will die. So, we have to enjoy each and every moment. Few people are too conscious about
thier
of them or themselves
their
 health. They are not enjoying the
life
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 with their calm and steady
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. To be honest, my friends
are making
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make
 every day awesome who
are intrested
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is interested
are interested
on
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in
 short term
life
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. They explore all the places in the world and
taste
put to the test, as for its quality, or give experimental use to
test
 all types of foods. In conclusion, it is all depends on
person
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a person's lifestyle
person lifestyle
the person's lifestyle
person's lifestyle
person's life style
life
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 style. Some
are believes
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believe
 that it is good to be live long term
life
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 with
peaceful
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peace
.
Also
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,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 had a belief that those are enjoying short
time
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life
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 with
an
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a
 good excitement and joyful. At some
time
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, you will saturate on each moment. I would say that rather than to live short
time
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,
being
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
 a long
life
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 is best
to
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for
 me.

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