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Some people think that books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, reading books is an unpopular option as a source of
knowledge and leisure
Suggestion
leisure and knowledge
. It is considered by some that books are losing its importance. In my opinion, I totally agree because
advancement
Suggestion
the advancement
 of technology has brought us an easier way to access
information
 and a wide range of free visual entertainment. Technology
such
 as artificial intelligence helps us to gather all the data around the world and allow us to obtain it through surfing the Internet using the search engine, Google, which is totally free.
For example
, if we need
information
 on a particular topic for the assignment, we just have to simply type in the keyword,
then
 Google it, all the articles related will pop us within a short period of time.
Furthermore
, we no longer need to flip the thick book page by page, but at our fingertips.
Thus
, the demand of book as source of
information
 decreases.
Moreover
, people today think reading books are boring and uninteresting activity because there are many kinds of entertainment available
such
 as remote game console, computer and mobile games, and sports, which are more exciting and fun.
Moreover
, some people enjoy watching video or reality show online using YouTube.
Besides
, it is considered by some that playing sports
such
 as badminton and football enable toxic released through sweat, which can strengthen the body’s immune system and keep fit. In conclusion, technology has made our life a more comfortable, time-saving and money saving, making reading a replaceable option as a source of
information
 and entertainment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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